The echo of clocks
We will write till
the waters are gone
Till parched
the earth submits to sun
and wind
to
becomes lifeless barrens
The dry stalks of humanity
will wilt
wither and brittle
Browning in the baking heat
feet blistered and broken
to fall at last
become
the dust
create the dust
We will write
when we are memory
imprints
left on the skin of dead land
A rusted steel girder
jutting out of the ground
A leaflet
blown widder shins
across the aching plains
Our legacy
the still no air will bring
We will write
till the ink has become time
only marking the passing
the ending held in
the echo of clocks
12 comments:
hello my friend. once again beautiful work as always. sorry that it took me so long to post. but i have been really busy okay gonna let ya go know. love ya
-kora
Hello Kora, glad to know you are around and ok, hope school is not too hard at the moment.
Be well.
far out buddy. this is great!
Tell me ... is the aliteration in this deliberate? I mean, did you stop to choose words that fitted, or did it just pop out like that?
Moon, have you ever known me to do anything deliberately with my poetry?
Perish the thought lol
No, its just how my mind works.
I suspect some people think in certain patterns,a subconscious rhythm I suppose.
I just wondered, because it's not something I do deliberately either, but people comment sometimes as though I have thought about it and chosen those words deliberately. I sometimes wonder about how other people write ... whether it is that deliberate for them.
I have been accused? *probably not the right word*, of the same thing, oh your assonance or resonance or alliterations are really good etc, but its all subconscious for me, and you by the sound of it.
Sound is really important to the poem, the flow, if it sounds right when you say it, it works much better.
That’s why I don’t like a lot of the poetry I read these days. You read the words, and while yes the images may be fresh, or the language unique, it is jarring to read, it doesn’t resonate with me when I read it, too rough, not smooth sounding, lacks the flow I guess.
I know that mine just comes to mind i really don't think about it and if i do try and think about it, it doesn't sound right to me.
so is mine flowy or jaring to read, please be honest... i just write what comes to mind honestly...
okay toodles.
do you have the URL for your blog Kora? I can't access your profile and I've lost the link.
www.crimsonrosepoetry.blogspot.com
Thanks Kora. Your writing does seem to flow very nicely.
Hi Kora,Im with the Moon, your poetry has a nice flow to it.
just checking because i don't want anything i write to be forced or choppy if it is. let me know and i will try to fix it. Okay?
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